Unit1 Friendship写作课案例

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浙江省高考英语改革拉开了帷幕,英语150分的地位依然“居高临下”。而随着单项选择题的“消失”,阅读理解、完形填空和作文将凸显它们的地位。笔者今年刚好接手新高一,觉得写作应从高一着手“抓起”,下面是模块一unit1 Friendship 的写作案例。   

    借助阅读顺利进入写作环节。             

Task I: Xiao Dong’s trouble

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Task II: Your suggestions:

 

          ideas

         why

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Task III: How to write a persuasive letter

 

【建议信结构】:

开头:提出写信的原因或对方面临的问题 (针对对方对自己的信任简单表示感谢)

过渡句引出建议

主体: 第一条建议+理由

       第二条建议+理由

       第三条建议+理由

结尾:表达自己的愿望。(希望建议有帮助, 同时阐明仅供对方参考。)

 

【建议信开头常用句式】

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【表达建议的常用句式】

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【建议信结尾常用句式】

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【典型例题】

假如你是你校英语报社的编辑Miss Wang, 现在晓东因不善于交流在交友过程中遇到了困难,请你用英语给他写一封回信,给他提出一些建议和意见。

1. 开头已给出,不计入字数

2. 字数 80--100

写作分析:

题材: _____________________  时态:____________________ 人称:________________

 

Task IV Writing

 Dear Xiaodong,

     I am sorry you are having trouble in making friends. However, the situation is easy to change if you take my advice. Here are some tips to help you.

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                                                            Yours,

                                                            Miss Wang

下面为习作分析:

一. 本次习作存在的问题:

1.     卷面与字迹-------写作态度

2.     言简意赅简单句   

   Firstly, I think it is good for you to talk with your classmates. Because you can find some interesting topics and you can talk with them. Secondly, you should always smile. And it will let people know that you are a friendly person, so they will want to make friends with you. Thirdly, it would be a good idea if you always help others. People will think that you are helpful and friendly. And they would like to stay with you.  

3.     每一条建议下面的理由“苍白无力”

  Firstly, you should be friendly and outgoing. You need to talk more with your classmates. Secondly, you can join some clubs and you can make many good friends there.Thirdly, you can make a penpal, and always write to each other.

4.     “废句”连篇, 太扯

Secondly, I think it is necessary for you to refuse being shy. Now, talking is a skill which can help you a lot in your daily life. Don’t be shy, if you don’t always express your thoughts, you will be unhappy forever. It’s not a bad thing to tell people what you are thinking. Maybe you will receive some advice by accident. Be brave, my boy.

 

. 如何解决问题?

1. 句子要力求简洁但丰满, 简单句复杂句交错使用。

1). Here are some tips to help you. I think it would be beneficial.

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2). Don’t forget to wear smiles on your face. That will make you be a warm-hearted person.

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3.) Secondly, I think it’s suitable to start a talk with your classmates. By doing this, others will 

  think you are an easy-going and friendly person.

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4.)You can give your classmates a hand when they need help. It would be beneficial if you could do that.

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2. Supportive sentences要始终为中心观点服务,否则就是“废句”。(谋篇布局的重要性)

  Eg1. My advice for you is to be brave enough. Start a conversation and it will help you get to know each other better.

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   Eg2. Besides, you’d better wear smiles on your face By doing this, you will let others know that you are a friendly person.

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  Eg3. Thirdly, you could give a hand to your classmates when they are in trouble. Because it can make you helpful and friendly in your friends’ eyes.

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参考例文:

Dear Xiaodong,

     I am sorry you are having trouble in making friends. However, the situation is easy to change if you take my advice. Here are some tips to help you.

Firstly, why not learn about your classmates’ likes and dislikes? Then you can have much in common with them. It can help you get along well with them easily. Secondly, taking an active part in the discussions in your class helps to show you are friendly. Meanwhile, you can get to know more different people around. Thirdly, it would be a good idea to help others when they are in trouble and show them you are just kind-hearted and helpful to people all around.

With time going on, people will know you better and will like to make friends with you if you follow the tips above.

                                                           Yours,

                                                               Miss Wang

Dear Xiaodong,

     I am sorry you are having trouble in making friends. However, the situation is easy to change if you take my advice. Here are some tips to help you.

Firstly, I strongly suggest that you should be friendly. Don’t forget to wear smiles on your face, for your charming smiles show that you are easy-going enough to be made friends with.

Secondly, it would be a good idea if you join a club or join in some activities organized by school. It is obviously a good chance to get to know more people and share your common interests.

Thirdly, if you meet someone you’d like to speak to, please don’t hesitate. Why not start a conversation and ask their likes and dislikes. By doing so, you may find someone who is likely to be your friend.

I hope my advice will help you out of the present situation.

                                                             Yours,

Miss Wang

    通过本堂写作课的讲解和分析,学生不仅对建议信的结构有了了解,对如何给出有“价值”的意见和建议也做到了心中有数,笔者认为这是一堂比较实用的写作课。

 

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